this is hilarious, have a read haha

omg this is so damn funny!

I don't have time to read the whole thing but from what I've read its "Good"

the intro is too long for my liking... I prefer it when stories get to the action sooner.

Trying to fit a short story into 21 words or less is taking the defensive. This person was obviously thinking "They want a short story? I'll show them a short story ! " Shame it had to be so complicated. I've seen people who could say the same thing without using a word, but you might have had trouble giving the look on their face an A+.

When my older sister was in high school english, she was taught an even shorter one;

"For sale; baby shoes. Never used."

I heard this one when my mother was kicking the crib. I'm retired.

ha ha ha funny clip